| 2005-11-02 13:38:50 |
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rite sumr fuck thing dat people can understand!!!! |
| 2005-11-14 22:12:22 |
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Hey I really enjoyed that .it is my kind of fantsy I look forward to reading more Congratulations |
| 2005-11-16 11:32:04 |
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Wonderful Story Plz continue!!! |
| 2005-11-25 12:41:07 |
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Conch is an asshole don't pay any attention to what he says. I gave it a 6/10 |
| 2005-12-18 23:35:53 |
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Better character development would come from gettting inside their heads....memories, flashbacks, etc. These would explain some of their actions and thoughts. Otherwise, story is moving along well. Keep it up, you are a good writer. Still need better proofing/grammar. Hot stuff! |