| 2005-11-07 00:58:50 |
My Daughter's Panties
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Take your time, let the story develope, dont pay any attention to these guys, excessive masturbation has addled their brains. It is a good story but I have a few gripes. When you change speakers in your dialogue, start a new paragraph. I have no idea what sandy looks like except that she has a tan and not much pubic hair. 12 yo's know a lot more about sex than the agonizing birds and bees paragraph implied, as a matter of fact, if you reread the b&B paragraph I bet you would delete it altogether. Usually fetish stories do not get much of an audiance, but I bet this one will grow legs and run for awhile. I look forward to part two (5). |