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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-07-21 22:50:27 | Airport Examination | meh..no good from me..but i guess its just not my thing |
| 2006-09-14 21:17:21 | Airport Examination | Well Done! 9/10 |
| 2006-10-12 02:30:49 | Airport Examination | Mix the dialog into paragraphs, rather than splitting it up amongst multiple lines; it gives it more of a professional physique, and makes other people [ The ones that actually give criticizing commentary, or actually rate truly ] actually want to read your stories. This story was good, but... Yeah. I got just a wee bit distracted with the spacing and such.. I don't mean cram it all into one huge long paragraph, but it looks like you did more of sentence by sentence by sentence by sentence, rather than in paragraph form, except for some places. ^^ 8/10. ~VF |
| 2006-10-13 14:30:32 | Airport Examination | I see what you mean-good feedback |
| 2006-11-29 03:42:34 | Airport Examination | not enought sex |