| 2006-07-03 12:21:55 |
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Good work, well paced and a good use of the setting. I am sure you have already heard of all the little inconsistanties, so i'll not bother. Just proofread and proofread till your eyes bug out. You will always miss something, but hopefully if there are not too many slips, we will miss them too. Nonetheless, a well crafted story. Keep writing. |
| 2006-07-13 02:15:14 |
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the skirt/towel slip-up was a momentary distraction but easily forgotten since the rest of the story was good...and thank you caitlin for the kind comments on "seductress-eileen"... |
| 2006-07-19 13:51:45 |
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great story, caitlin, hpoe there's a part 2 |
| 2006-07-29 05:50:44 |
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Now that was hot ... shot my load! |
| 2006-07-31 14:12:23 |
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that was great... blew my load everywhere.. thanks caitlin |