| 2005-12-15 22:30:29 |
Afican Slave Queen (Jungle Kidnap)
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the torture was sweet, the girl could have done with being a little less bland. hot white chick, blond hair, blue eyes? honestly, it's just a little overdone. otherwise it was pretty good. great descriptions, goodish plot line. id read more. |
| 2005-12-17 11:01:14 |
Afican Slave Queen (Jungle Kidnap)
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Hung2cum, it's a fucking porn story, leave the fucking politics out of it. finc..... great fucking story |
| 2005-12-22 18:17:16 |
Afican Slave Queen (Jungle Kidnap)
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i think you should have broken this down into a few parts....i cant get threw the whole thing....jsut keep coming back to it and trying to find my place |
| 2005-12-23 08:32:54 |
Afican Slave Queen (Jungle Kidnap)
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that is always a problem should you submit the full story or do chapters. Different readers have strong opinions either way. I do know from experience shorter stories get more final ratings so it would seem more readers get to the end |
| 2005-12-31 13:23:22 |
Afican Slave Queen (Jungle Kidnap)
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I took a break in the middle to look at some porn pictures, and then came back and read the rest. I assume there is going to be more, as some of the perversions I have read elsewhere have yet to be explored, including a possible kidnap of one of her friends. |