| 2005-12-29 17:41:12 |
His Debt 2
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so much more required! thats hot |
| 2006-01-07 23:08:27 |
His Debt 2
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thats pretty sexy but how does brian feel about this in the end will there be more to the story :( 9/10 |
| 2006-04-24 14:06:06 |
His Debt 2
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I feel sorry for Kimmy. she should just leave that bastard boyfriend of hers and come be with me at least I will treat her better. |
| 2005-12-16 11:56:48 |
A Thanksgiving to remember
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This story kind of sucks. You're supposed to write a story, not a manual. The whole 1 do what I say, 2 don't tell... is just horrible. You also need some major spell checking. You also rushed the action. Overall you need to learn how to write before you write again. |
| 2005-12-16 16:33:33 |
A Thanksgiving to remember
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uh... that did kinda suck. the other guy that commented was being pretty modest. you needa stop writing. |