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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-01-26 10:41:56 | The Sales Trip | ok, good story, but I saw the word "vary" pop up several times in your story. It is "very". Another thing--don't listen to people who criticize you for spelling who make spelling errors themselves...."Exallent" !!! 7/10 |
| 2006-01-26 22:25:55 | The Sales Trip | SOUTHSIDE FUCK NORTE ALL FAKE SURENOS RUN CALIFS WE DONT DIE WE FUCING MUTIPLY MOTHERFUCKER ANY CHAP THATS DOWN FOR THE RED WATCH YOUR FUCKIN BACK TRUE SUR BLUE PUTOS LENNOX 213 FROM LA LNX SUR MEANS SURENO UNITED RAZA SO U CANT STOP US U FUCKIN CHAPOUTS LNX SURX3 TO ALL THE SURENOS MUCH LOVE... |
| 2006-01-27 11:35:23 | The Sales Trip | It was a verry good story but I think you got a little carried away towards the end. No man is ever too tired for sex, especially when sex is a mother daughter special. You also had so much opportunity to weave the setting (Singapore) into the story. Instead all of the charectors had english names and the story might as well of been in Iowa. The typos were only mildly annoying (thats what keeps editors employed!), but the paragraphs were a little hard to follow. All in all, a good effort, keep writing. |
| 2006-01-27 19:34:28 | The Sales Trip | Hey I thought it was a very good story yes the names could of been better and yes a tab at the begining of each paragraph would of made the reading easier. But other than that i hope you keep writing and working on your spelling and grammer. |
| 2006-01-28 22:42:43 | The Sales Trip | good story, but you really need to learn to spell and use proper grammar |