| 2006-02-21 14:53:22 |
Love Letters.
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Does that last comment mean he killed her or that he simple scard her unconcious? Great story keep it up. |
| 2006-02-23 04:03:51 |
Love Letters.
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that was fucking beautiful. probably one of the best-writted dark erotica stories i've read in a LONG time. |
| 2006-02-26 02:28:48 |
Love Letters.
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Reader #2, I do want a second part. : ) I'll reveal that the main character is unconcious. |
| 2006-06-01 19:01:54 |
Love Letters.
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Nice wording here: it smelled highly of a cologne that stripped the soberness of your senses. Sounds you've gotten one insane lady here -- paranoia, torture fantasies. Give your writing a more critical glance. You've got some logic mistakes. For example, she didn't know why she was looking out the window, but she did so because the foliage was breathtaking. The victim is crazier is this story than the antagonist. Keep writing, if you have more to say . . . Either this is a horrible story, or you have left questions unanswered. I'm hoping for the former. Good job. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. |
| 2006-02-16 23:46:56 |
My Neighbors Dog
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weird but ok i guess if you are into dogs that much |