| 2006-03-07 19:30:21 |
Mike's Sleepover
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very good, more would be great |
| 2006-03-08 00:10:34 |
Mike's Sleepover
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very very good |
| 2006-03-10 17:55:19 |
Mike's Sleepover
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| 2006-03-11 08:52:19 |
Mike's Sleepover
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nice try but plz do improve ur grammer an afta completing the storry plz go through it .................... for gods sake... |
| 2006-03-13 13:43:07 |
Mike's Sleepover
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The grammar was a bit confusing, and the typos were plentyful, just run it through Microsoft Word or something first. Then it will be a great story. |