| 2006-03-04 13:01:10 |
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unrealistic girls. 12 yr. olds? 34C one in a thousand. drinking at age 12? Wasn't that like 6th grade? both of them might as well have been in high school. |
| 2006-03-04 13:37:40 |
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very good, sounds like me |
| 2006-03-04 21:41:09 |
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It was pretty predictable. There are a lot of father sets up camera in daughters room stories n this site. If you are going to write one, it should be at least as good as its forebearers. This was tired and uninspiring. You got in a hurry and at the end. The descriptions in the early parts were pretty decent though. kepp trying. by the way, its hard to give a lot of cred to a 20 yo writing about being the 36 yo father of a 12 yo. |
| 2006-03-05 07:53:39 |
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The first paragraph wasn't connected to the rest of the story. |
| 2006-03-30 02:48:42 |
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wow i really enjoyed this story ,thank you.i dont usualy leave comments but i would love a second part! |