| 2006-12-17 06:13:24 |
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good story up until we find out she wanted it all that time as well then it got too unreal . months of planning and all you realy had to do was tell her. I know the story is fiction but its better if its at least believable fiction. but your writing abillity is great keep it up |
| 2006-12-27 15:31:40 |
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not bad |
| 2007-01-10 08:21:13 |
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i agree with the reader above!! shit u r a perv!! |
| 2007-01-10 08:21:13 |
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i agree with the reader above!! shit u r a perv!! |
| 2007-01-10 08:21:13 |
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i agree with the reader above!! shit u r a perv!! |