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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-07-11 04:45:33 | I Remember Halloween | so wat if they had dna investagation it was a random act of violence that means the police would never check him or find for a dna test unless there was a witness |
| 2007-11-09 21:00:30 | I Remember Halloween | dont think so hard when you read a sex story people, its supposed to be "good clean fun" well in this case i suppose just really good fun :D |
| 2006-04-15 12:56:17 | Reunion [part2] | 10/10 Loved it. |
| 2006-04-15 15:56:01 | Best Night of His Life (So Far) | Nice story dont bring three girls into it tho it might cause the story to loose it realism. I liked the story because you did not exaggerate about cocksize like some stories with their 15 inchers etc. Kept it nice and realistic. Very good. |
| 2006-04-16 10:10:57 | Best Night of His Life (So Far) | Well, this was tough. The story was very formulaic and predictable, Describing breasts as a cup size has always been a pet peave of mine. They planned it? including the thunder storm? wow, their good! High school guys dont get reps for sexual prowess, except from themselves. and who owns a croset these days? On the flip side, your writing was well composed, the descriptions were OK and the sex was pretty well put together. You need to flesh out the charectors a little, i.e. making the 15 yo girls a little insecure, adding some physical quirks, something to make them more real. Nonetheless, you seem to have a decent hand. In some ways you have the skills, you just need a better story. Keep it up. |