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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-04-20 11:18:22 | After School Special_(2) | Ever head of paragraphs? If you had used them i might have bothered to read this |
| 2006-04-20 20:38:23 | After School Special_(2) | Hot story mister, I like when guys have fun in a threesome. Next chapter, they get to fuck e.o. :--)), and the girl. Paragraphs would help too. rudbi one |
| 2006-04-21 00:51:56 | After School Special_(2) | i want to see some anal on the guy |
| 2006-04-21 15:19:13 | After School Special_(2) | I don't get it. In all of your 27 years, have you never read a professionally written story or paid any attention to proper sentence or paragraph structure?? This could've been a good piece but, as it is, it reads like it was written in a hurry while simultaneously being distracted by something else... like jacking off to your own sketchy un-detailed fantasies (which probably include posting stuff like this to the internet). Try taking some clues from the pros and then next time, focus on writing and content instead of your dick! 2/10 |
| 2006-04-21 18:13:53 | After School Special_(2) | more! |