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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-04-28 03:16:44 | Caz & Me: Chapter 2 | I see the action is gettng better and better.. you need to go down on her more and give more detail on eating out her pussy.... I'm sure you love doing that as I do. |
| 2006-04-28 07:53:43 | Caz & Me: Chapter 2 | That will definatly be in the next chapter pussy eater, dont you worry about that |
| 2006-04-28 14:58:24 | Caz & Me: Chapter 2 | Good story , really enjoyrd it 9/10 |
| 2006-04-28 18:48:19 | Caz & Me: Chapter 2 | Thanks... i tried to be descriptive as much as humanly possible without turning it into a fuckfest I want the story to stay along the lines of roamace and not just hardcore sex. If you get what i mean... Anyways, im working on chapter 3 but it will be a while till its released |
| 2006-04-29 03:55:06 | Caz & Me: Chapter 2 | I appreciate your desire of wanting to maintain the romantic element, it is a tasty genre. Moreover, you seem to have a grasp [no pun intended] on your characters. One thing I find to be somewhat disconcerting, though, is your grammar: Pronoun usage, tense shifts, descriptors etc., and just an overall failure to proofread your work. Symbiote, don't misundersatnd, I am not downing you. Instead, and since it is your job to write for your audience, you should slow down. I think you're trying to hard to please the aforementioned audience through telling us instead of showing us. Remeber, though, less is more. Know what I mean? There are a couple more items that require attention, and I will elaborate on those soon. Overall, though, for a rookie-writer the content is delicious. |