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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-08-08 16:51:02 | The Beastmen and the Dark Knight | 10/10 Excellent opening! that's how you start a story! you had me there! i'm confused, though. i would like to know what the hell is going on in this story. the year? the reason for everything? is this the second chapter of a story? if not, you need to write that first chapter pronto. my blonde head is confused! however, i will look for more of this story, although it causes my brain to ache with confusion -- ashley barbie |
| 2006-07-16 14:36:04 | the tanning salon | Eh. you probably need a little more experience both sexually and as a writer before you try to write a story in a female voice. The language was not very believable. I doubt very many middle aged women frequently use cunt and cum-slut in this context. And oral cavity? Nah, rework the language a little and try again. |
| 2006-07-16 23:04:20 | the tanning salon | Her language was just fine, u must not have very much exp.or you'd know how women talk when they're getting laid. writer, u gotta 10, for talk, the story, and the sex. rudstillhard one |
| 2006-07-22 01:30:23 | the tanning salon | What find of fucking bullshit is this ? |
| 2007-05-31 07:57:03 | the tanning salon | I thought it was awesome. Thanks heaps! its true about the way women talk when theyre gettin fucked but seriously that was a great attempt. 8/10 |