2006-08-17 17:44:45 |
Daddy's Wet Dream
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Lame. Amaturish and rushed. You jumped all over the place with the names, the plot and the dialogue. The sex was very unrealistic, why was she sitting in the shower? how exactly does one get into a standing 69 in the shower? wop, theu were suddenly on the toilet. pornstars have to practice that shit with stunt doubles. how can you expect readers to like your stories if do not respect us enough to proofread your story? It just was not very good. even if you take out the inconsistancies it is a turd in a flower garden. try again. |