| 2006-08-25 17:15:59 |
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THIS IS FUCKING GREAT, KEEP IT GOING, SOFTSTROKER GIVES YA A 15 ON THIS ONE, KOOL. |
| 2006-08-25 17:31:44 |
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I fucking hate you. It is so unfair. How can you actually be getting better? You were already the queen of this joint, are you trying for popette? You are simply a class ahead of the rest of us. The descriptions were phenomanal, the analgies of the cars were nice. You did a great job of bringing out the sexuality of grown women. Mark, well, mark is still a little two demensional, almost a prop. The little end thingy with the mom was also a little predictable. Your now the premier writer on the site k, thems big shoes. You keep writing like this, you'll be wearing them for a while. Keep it up. |
| 2006-08-25 22:49:27 |
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Good continuation, I enjoyed it. A couple errors of tense and small things, A couple times when it looked like you might witched the paragraphes, like with the chemise coming off and then is still rubbing her brests through, All in all though a very good story, that could benefit from just a quick run-through with a a copy-and-paste tool |
| 2006-08-27 19:47:21 |
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awesome bring on part 4 |
| 2006-08-27 21:14:22 |
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owesome, Kimiko... I want to fuck you like that, hard and longlasting |