| 2007-01-10 15:41:38 |
A longing lust of mine for thomas 3
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look the story was good but too short and didn't have enough detail. Seems like you started and then ran out of time. Also, why even allow comments if you just want people to tell you how great your story was? the point of comments is constructive criticism. Decent overall plot, but severly lacking in the detail and time put into the story. 6/10. |
| 2007-01-10 21:03:46 |
A longing lust of mine for thomas 3
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An event yes, but very disjointed. Add a little realism. |
| 2007-01-13 14:57:17 |
A longing lust of mine for thomas 3
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short but cood |
| 2007-02-05 17:30:13 |
A longing lust of mine for thomas 3
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That was amazing!! i think you should write more... |
| 2007-06-17 07:47:38 |
A longing lust of mine for thomas 3
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not bad 9/10 its short |