| 2006-09-22 02:24:44 |
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Well. I'm not sure what to say about this one. this seems more like the middle of a story. We need some more plot development then what you have given us, also from the girls response it almost seems like this is the first time that it happened. I suggest you write down your thoughts more completely when writing, not jump around like you seem to be doing, not that I'm much better. |
| 2006-09-22 07:56:59 |
Child..rape?
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this story is not good at all |
| 2006-09-23 02:34:13 |
Child..rape?
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man awesome story i got soo hard!!! keep writing!!! |
| 2006-09-24 04:28:23 |
Child..rape?
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It was confusing. Maybe if you rewrote it, it would be better. The idea is good but take your time it writing. If you write too fast and don't think you get whatever that was. |
| 2006-09-29 20:15:39 |
Child..rape?
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I would not call this crap. This makes crap look really good. Better hurry back to Mc Donnalds. Your on Fries tonight. Don't do this again. |