| 2006-10-02 09:10:06 |
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not bad story, your sentence structure is jerky and hard to follow. hope the second one is better |
| 2006-10-02 17:59:32 |
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Your comment is one reason I will likely quit submitting. There are 7 other parts of this story and you read and comment on the 7th. |
| 2006-10-02 23:42:57 |
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great story content, keep the story coming |
| 2006-10-03 05:25:30 |
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well its true, go learn english then come back and write some more.. really we don't care for your ego. You just consistently keep pushing out the same old crappy product. |
| 2006-10-03 08:29:31 |
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You really need to get over yourself. This erotica at its best, porn at least. Hello. It is not literature. Rate based enjoyment and stop being the grammer police. |