| 2007-03-03 19:52:38 |
First Time With My Sister Lindsay
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reminds me of my ex lindsey we went out when we were 14 ive always wanted to fuck her she was skinny nice ass though oh my god |
| 2007-03-03 23:09:03 |
First Time With My Sister Lindsay
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Story line's not bad, but go slower with more description -- try some more... |
| 2007-03-04 00:10:30 |
First Time With My Sister Lindsay
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write more |
| 2007-03-04 01:12:18 |
First Time With My Sister Lindsay
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great idea but you need to expand on it. you also need to convey more emotion by being more descriptive. |
| 2007-03-04 23:11:39 |
First Time With My Sister Lindsay
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not bad |