| 2006-11-08 14:19:57 |
Tanya
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Very weak ending |
| 2006-11-08 14:26:44 |
Tanya
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Well my friend there is more than one woman out there that would like the same thing. Quit writing and start cruising. Good story although the sex could use more work. |
| 2006-11-08 15:45:37 |
Tanya
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i thank you for your commets. this was my first story that i wrote 4 years ago. when i posted it here the other day i left it as is dispite the fact that i wanted to revise the ending. |
| 2006-11-09 01:59:45 |
Tanya
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i like it hope you find your special friend |
| 2006-11-09 04:58:09 |
Tanya
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Only a so-so story. Needs lots of improvement, inclding grammar and spelling. But don't give up. Keep trying. I didn't care for the descriptive style, the "He saysc .... she says." |