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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-01-23 21:57:52 | ALICIA'S STORY PART ONE | doesn't flow well content good but add more detail and make it flow |
| 2007-01-24 21:45:05 | ALICIA'S STORY PART ONE | what a stupid shitty story after all i had no choice lol |
| 2007-01-24 23:42:22 | ALICIA'S STORY PART ONE | A funny place to stop. It is a good start but needs more. |
| 2007-01-25 00:00:24 | ALICIA'S STORY PART ONE | wHY DONT YOU READ THE NEXT CHAPTER IT IS HERE. MY MY HOW MANY LITERARY CRITICS WE HAVE HERE. PROBABLY CANT EVEN SPELL LITERARY CORRECTLY EITHER. |
| 2007-01-26 05:54:03 | ALICIA'S STORY PART ONE | Err...When you type, you place everyone as "I" Or at least the mother, father and the kid. It's very hard to follow when a sentence starts with one person and then another, but its still "i" or "me" I cant say what i like or dislike cuse i stoped after the first paragragh, i couldnt stand that issue i talked about, So i ain't gonna rate it, but just some friendly advice ^^; |