| 2007-07-05 23:51:16 |
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It's alright..but try reading it out loud once and proofreading before submitting it to a public website. Some of those mistakes were just embarassing... |
| 2007-10-14 22:19:58 |
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Great story man, keep it up |
| 2007-10-20 00:23:45 |
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wow... the grammar was horrible. sorry to say, but the structure was just really bad... |
| 2007-11-27 08:53:42 |
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honestly man a child has better grammar, though the story was well thought out. your story's aren't too bad just fix that grammar man |
| 2007-12-18 02:02:29 |
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got chills runin up my back |