| 2007-03-14 11:16:12 |
Goddess_(1)
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Thumbs down dude, the characters were outrageously fake, as was the scenario, and the description of the girl was a mixed up cliche. Grammar errors are very distracting in these stories, and you had piles of them. |
| 2007-03-14 11:56:41 |
Goddess_(1)
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why dont you lot fuck off about grammer and all that bollocks your not hear to correct peoples spelling are you your hear for the same reason that most of us are and thats reading about sex so fuck off if you are going to be a complete twat |
| 2007-03-14 21:01:17 |
Goddess_(1)
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Not believeable... |
| 2007-03-14 21:01:21 |
Goddess_(1)
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I think just a bit longer and it would be great. as is, it's good. |
| 2007-03-14 22:33:29 |
Goddess_(1)
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Guys, it a sex story. I wasn't aiming to make it absolutely realistic. Sorry. |