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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-03-21 11:51:28 | My Bitch Cousin n Her Freind | grammar check!!!! and seems a little rushed |
| 2007-03-21 12:17:58 | My Bitch Cousin n Her Freind | stealing is bad.. quit it.. douche |
| 2007-03-21 22:14:29 | My Bitch Cousin n Her Freind | The lack of grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc., really screws up the story. Look at a "regular" story and see how they do these things, plus how they break all the run-on lines with paragraphs -- the idea here is good, tho... |
| 2007-03-21 23:40:40 | My Bitch Cousin n Her Freind | work on grammar. really hard ot read. spelling nds work to. b more discriptiv |
| 2007-03-22 00:01:36 | My Bitch Cousin n Her Freind | Play up the personal interactions. You sit down, throw the girl a few lines and she's in your bedroom getting naked? Fantasies are good, but I prefer a smidgen of realism. Put in the conversation, lure her back to the room. The seduction is what makes the story hot, not just rushing off to the fucking. Also, as others said, punctuation and grammar will get you far. |