| 2007-04-25 15:14:52 |
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continue plz |
| 2007-04-26 00:07:58 |
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Good story and well written indeed. One question, you didn't mention that both their lower lips had to be bleeding from all the biting. |
| 2007-04-26 13:32:02 |
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couldn't be better |
| 2007-04-27 00:54:08 |
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Very good. Work on some grammer though because some parts were difficult to read. |
| 2007-04-27 22:32:17 |
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pretty good story, very descriptive, needs a little more editing though to catch the grammatical mistakes, i'll give it a 9 |