| 2007-06-24 02:31:54 |
Overnight Sleepover3( My First Film)
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I'm going to agree with the Reader who posted on 05-12-07 - 20:33... But, here is what I'm going to add. If you are going to write, then learn your craft. Writing in the first person is really hard to do, but you can do it, with some work. Here is some advice, when you write, always do it in past tense, never in present tense, unless it is in quotes. Once you have gotten this incest thing out of your system, write a real good story and I'll look you up to see if it is good enough to publish. |
| 2007-07-11 04:41:53 |
Overnight Sleepover3( My First Film)
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very good lets hope mommy n dadddy never see tht video LOL ud be fucked |
| 2008-01-22 06:24:48 |
Overnight Sleepover3( My First Film)
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wow loved your story man. Now make 1 with taylor having your baby and that your mom and dad and her mom and dad find out that it is yours but then they are ok with it because they talked about it and now you are living with her in her mom and dads house and your sister comes over now and then. Keep up the story we all want to read some more....10/10 |
| 2008-02-06 15:12:22 |
Overnight Sleepover3( My First Film)
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Good story. Let mom catch them and join in on the fun. Have a 4-way with mom. |
| 2007-04-29 04:34:36 |
MY Darling Amma and Sis Part 2
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You need to have paragraph breaks. It wouldn't hurt to gain a better grasp on English grammer |