| 2007-05-23 21:11:19 |
Babysitting the Twins Again
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Really was no need for FOUR epilogues... |
| 2007-05-23 21:50:29 |
Babysitting the Twins Again
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really saw an image for the first half. the second half seemed a little less detail. 8/10 |
| 2007-05-23 22:15:25 |
Babysitting the Twins Again
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kind of slow at first but once it got to the sex scene it was very nice. A came at the end. |
| 2007-05-23 22:43:29 |
Babysitting the Twins Again
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what a shitty ass fucking father...FUCK HIM. |
| 2007-05-24 00:12:45 |
Babysitting the Twins Again
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It was very well written, and i enjoyed the 'action' scenes. Perhaps more detail in 2nd half. Also, i know every writer has the urge to expand a story, but to actually go through with a marrage, pregnancy, and fucking the daughter, this would cover maye 15 years.... equal to maye 25 stories... think about writing that much volume |