| 2007-09-21 21:10:27 |
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it was easier to read because you used paragraphs..but your spelling is still shit...and your plot is all fucked up...he goes up the tree and hugs her then walks away....and how does she get in the hospital...and how can you write all that shit and then skip over the sex at the end...seriously dude, just stop writing...for our sake and for yours, stop writing and keep what little pride you have left |
| 2007-09-21 22:58:47 |
the tree part 3
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u fucking gay ass reader u need to stfu its in the story it siad " 5:00 pm the car wasnt there" her car smart 1 dumb ass pation to a stroy when u fucking read it you smart ass punk gay ass bitch man fuck you i bet u cant do beter then me ass whipe go fuck your self bitch |
| 2007-09-22 09:09:20 |
the tree part 3
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lol i did find a mest up part sory guys its suppose to be she looked at the door way oops :) |
| 2007-09-23 02:27:50 |
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ok man i let all this slide for ur other stories but wtf. this one was just bad. the story line was hard to follow, the grammer was horrible, and halve of that was off of another writers story. ok and ur excuse of english being ur second languige, its mine to and i spell a shit load better. get hooked on phonics or sumtin |
| 2007-09-25 22:54:07 |
the tree part 3
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You'd be wise to stop responding to people's comments because all you end up doing is reinforcing their point that you're an illiterate no-talent. I suggest that instead of writing, you read: short stories, magazine articles, anything. Read and compare. I think then you may understand how your work in no way resembles legitimate writing. |