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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-01-04 02:40:15 | WALKING_(1) | Every day that summer I took a walk in the woods and it took me a little time to build up the courage to ask if I could join in, the said “yes”, and that was the best dam summer I ever had, it was even better when there Aunt Anna came to visit, we did some kinky shit. Lol, wtf? |
| 2008-01-22 17:08:53 | WALKING_(1) | On the one hand, the others are right, this could do with a little polish, some elbow grease, and a spell checker. On the other hand, the effort and imagination necessary to writing fantasy stories is there, it just needs a little coaxing and some encouragement. You could be a good writer if you really tried and made sure that the spelling was right before being submitted. A creative writing class wouldn't hurt either, but i don't think it's absolutely necessary. Some people want more detail, others want stuff that isn't in the style of 'confessions of a voyeur'. Your next story should have a little more detail, and should be from the point of view of someone involved in the story itself from the beginning, not as someone who spied on them the first few times, then joined in later. That would be a good lesson for you, a challenge to see how well you can write. There's no need to take my advice, but i have been trying my hand at writing as well, and i find that while the first person perspective is difficult to manage at times, it feels better than a 'watching from the sidelines' perspective. 4/10 for the story, maybe a 5/10 because of effort. Believe me, that's higher than what i normally rate most of the stories i have read. My own rate about a 6/10, 7/10 for effort. So you're not half bad. |
| 2008-01-02 04:43:50 | An invitation is not what it always seems to be | Follow up with what the clients do with them? |
| 2008-01-02 21:28:01 | An invitation is not what it always seems to be | Shit sucks... |
| 2008-01-03 10:40:33 | An invitation is not what it always seems to be | Thankyou for your positive comments,I will endevour to put thinking cap on and write.Evil Bunny |