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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-01-31 04:15:52 | cousin Hailey gets her cousins big surprise | I don't understand what everyone is ranting about. This story really wasn't appealing. It wasn't bad, mind you; it just wasn't good, either. To start, your grammar is appalling & minimalistic. I assure you that commas, periods, & the various other punctuation marks are not simply for show, they serve a purpose. Learn to use punctuation properly! Word choice is my next gripe. The biggest mistake amateur writers make is the overuse of a particular set of words or phrases. In this case, "Cuz" permeates the story. I'm sorry, but that word is too cold & informal; it makes them seem inhuman. Also, "cock," "pussy" & "ass" aren't what make a good sex story. You need to use exciting language; words that inspire desire in your readers! You've got spirit, kid. Now, work on your form! |
| 2008-01-31 05:54:41 | cousin Hailey gets her cousins big surprise | You all should be in kindergarten as your obviously of very immature intelligence.This story was so unsexy and boreing that it shouldn't even be on this site |
| 2008-01-31 10:02:44 | cousin Hailey gets her cousins big surprise | 4;15 if you think that this story isn't your cup of tea then you should write one yourself. i guess there is at least one detractor of all things good. I thought the story brilliant and a budding love between two kids even thoush its a wrong kind of love |
| 2008-01-31 10:15:54 | cousin Hailey gets her cousins big surprise | 4:15 If you are looking for professional authors then you are on the wrong site. it seems to me that perhaps you are a flaming homosexual. Consider the spirit of the story which is sweet and loving rather than punctuation marks |
| 2008-01-31 10:55:14 | cousin Hailey gets her cousins big surprise | what guy hasn't fantasized about fucking their aunt or cousin and sister. u did a good job |