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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-03-07 19:49:57 | Great read. Amazing Cliffhangers suck though. | |
| 2008-03-08 22:14:02 | hey sexy | |
| 2008-02-13 09:08:08 | Fucking Adri, an older woman | quite good - can see all sorts of possible following stories. give it 8/10 |
| 2008-02-13 13:25:28 | Fucking Adri, an older woman | Need to work on your editing. Dialouge can be really complicated, so don't feel too bad. Just take a look at other writings on the net, and you should be set. Also, limit the amount of exclimation points. One does the trick, three can be be annoying. Other then that, solid story. Very good work. Keep at it. |
| 2008-02-15 09:56:48 | Fucking Adri, an older woman | Just one thing....exactly who is Adri? At first, the reader thinks it is the older woman, but later in the story both Steven and the woman call her husband Adri. That's a bit confusing, but the story is not bad. 8/10 |