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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2004-09-11 14:05:32 | staying after school | Where r the details? |
| 2004-10-12 13:16:55 | staying after school | DETAIL |
| 2004-10-26 17:26:41 | staying after school | like every one eles wrote DETAIL make it longer her wouldn't just pull out his cock |
| 2004-11-05 23:38:35 | staying after school | Learn to write and spell and make it longer. |
| 2005-06-01 05:18:05 | staying after school | How fucking lame is this.. Were you jerking off writing it, cause the further into the story you go, the worse the spelling and grammar gets.. If you can't write properly, don't! Ever heard of paragraphs? Hell, have you even TAKEN English lessons at school? You don't have speech marks in between speech from the same person, stupid! The description of Madison is alright, but thats about all you described.. The sex moves WAAAY too fast and you can't make head or tail of anything.. USE PARAGRAPHS! PUNCTUATION! Jesus, even some decent spelling would be helpful... In short, LEARN TO WRITE. |