| 2007-01-05 18:17:14 |
Well Used_(0)
|
I agree w/ Master Roth on that one. |
| 2007-04-27 01:23:52 |
Well Used_(0)
|
cum is such a weird word. especially when you say it like a gagillion times in the presence of a couple of paragraphs. |
| 2004-02-14 01:23:04 |
Well Used_(1)
|
Well, aside from the subject matter (submissive sex slave) there's not much here. It's all "middle". There's no beginning or end. Develop her story, develop his, get them together, show how this fulfills her and give a glimpse of what her/his world will be like from now on. |
| 2004-02-29 00:40:09 |
Well Used_(1)
|
I cannot add to what Master Roth has stated. |
| 2004-03-14 00:16:55 |
Well Used_(1)
|
Actually, i find his writing to be quite decriptive and creative. I also did so on a previous writing in which i again noticed that Master Roth posted his negative view. You know.. as a submissive myself, i find i got somewhat lost in this one.. and by lost, i mean in a good way. Not everything needs a beginning and and end..... i think those of us with imaginations can fill that in for ourselves. Thank You for sharing, Mr. Williams. |