| 2006-01-04 04:08:07 |
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alright dude that is some seriously fucked up shit, you really need help dude i mean im not trying to be negative i mean the actual writing was all right but seriously what the hell is wrong with you dude, you are going to hell for sure |
| 2006-01-28 01:08:59 |
A Simple Beginning Gone Twisted
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people like you....i kick their ass |
| 2006-01-30 20:13:01 |
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Interesting... Not necessarily erotic however. As a writer, I would actually venture to say that the author may have not originally intended it as eroticaI I deal in sociopathic disorders as well, and my recommendation is to edit. Fix the grammatical and spelling errors, add a few more details. You want to really freak these fuckers out? Give a detailed description of the cannabalistic act. 7/10 |
| 2006-03-31 02:30:20 |
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I found the overall idea of the story to be good. My only complaint is that there were too few erotic points to it. More detail in where the girl was stabbed, or exactly how her cunt was eaten would have helped. other than that, good story. These people need to stop antagonizing you for writing it...dont they read the description? What were they expecting? A cinderalla story? |
| 2006-04-12 08:15:15 |
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YOU FUCKIN SICK FUCKIN JEFFERY DOMMER WANNABES HOW ABOUT I KILL ONE OF YOU SICK FUCKS AND I TAKE A DUMP ON YOU FOR A COUPLE OF MONTHS THEN SICK FUCK THAT WROTE THIS AND ALL HIS FAGGOT BUDDIES CAN EAT HIS ROTTING CORPS FLYS ALL OVER THE PLACE. THEN I WILL KILL YOU AND SHOVE YOU DOWN IN THE SEWER WHERE SCUMP LIVE IT IS YUR NEW HOM GET USED TO IT YUR SOUL IS GOING TO HELLLLLLLL LOSERS YOU NO WHATS FOR DINNER BEEF IS WHATSS FOR DINNER. NOT FUCKING HUMAN BEING YOU WILL DIE LIKE JEFFERY DOMMER DID IN PRISON GETTING BANGED BY BUBBA AND THEN SHANKED |