2004-06-19 11:29:46 |
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Lets see Zeppelin...Not long enough of a story, I think there should be a little more depth into the main character, I dont even know his name. Plus I think you should have added way way WAY more description / detail in the story about it all. I mean you went through the whole sex scene with probably less then five words describing in detail what they were doing. But overall it was a pretty good story man. |
2004-06-24 06:03:03 |
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wow.....can i fuck you please??? |
2004-06-24 10:28:29 |
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of course you can. . . . . . |
2004-06-29 18:14:49 |
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still waiting to hear what Jack Sprat has to say. . . . . |
2004-06-30 19:45:09 |
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For your first story, i think that you did great. It was a little short but it still fuckin rocked. |