| 2005-01-03 23:25:33 |
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only 3 spelling mistakes that i read out should be our and hadn't instead of had and um As instead of s but um ... good story *implodes* |
| 2005-01-04 17:48:39 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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You start by telling us about the litterary device of plot development and then you write the first chapters in one paragraph. I just didn't read. |
| 2005-01-11 21:13:52 |
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The only complaints I have are that the first two chapters are unparagraphed and the bit about her fucking him with her clit (kinda unreal - no one has a 2 inch clit!). Other than that great. I'd say this is the best story I've read on this site. |
| 2005-01-11 22:43:55 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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good story long and lots of sex. this story the onlt story i gave a 10/10 too good job. people that don't like this story fuck them. better then what they can do anyday but next time plz put words apart more lil hard to read and make a part 2 to see how him and his janet did. ~out~ |
| 2005-01-15 03:22:28 |
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Please, PLEASE write a sequal. I don't care about speeling mistakes or paragraph use, the story was freakin awsome! Please write a sequal! |