| 2004-07-21 03:40:02 |
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great story,but it needs punctuation/paragraphs, work on it and keep writing!!!! |
| 2004-07-31 00:52:38 |
Marie's 40th birthday surprise
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I agree with the others, it's too hard to read without punctuation and paragraphs. |
| 2004-10-25 20:30:36 |
Marie's 40th birthday surprise
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Have you ever heard of paragraphs, punctuation and spelling!? |
| 2004-11-22 02:06:44 |
Marie's 40th birthday surprise
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I refused to read this piece of shit due to the lack of punctuation, period. Don't waste my fucking time when I'm trying to jerk off. |
| 2005-05-05 16:20:51 |
Marie's 40th birthday surprise
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I read two lines and I knew this was a MORON !! |