| 2004-10-24 00:40:41 |
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Great story, but you need to work on the puchtuation and the paragraph separation in the first section. |
| 2005-03-15 20:03:20 |
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good writing, but PLEASE learn paragraph seperation..first rule Seperate EVERY time someone talks. |
| 2005-07-26 11:27:25 |
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i liked it, a bit fast moving at the end... |
| 2005-09-19 05:29:55 |
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ok shut the fuck up about the mistakes you understood it right? yo that was a great story i hope my year of coll. is like this |
| 2006-12-24 11:08:28 |
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I came five times while rading this! |