| 2004-10-10 01:04:34 |
JADA
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I get the point, but... THIS IS A PORN SITE, NOT LITTLE RIDE RIDING HOOD< MORAL TIME. |
| 2004-10-13 02:52:41 |
JADA
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The ending needed a more harried feeling to bring the sudden fear and confusion Sam was feeling... All the buildup with his lust needed more of a slapdown. More of a lesson learned so to speak. |
| 2004-10-16 11:36:01 |
JADA
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fuckin good |
| 2004-10-21 19:56:03 |
JADA
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good story....well written but it did need a bit more at the end. I particularly liked him pissing himself and like an animal she sniffed it to smell the fear in him. Long version of perhaps a few hundred pages could be a good book for publishing. |
| 2004-11-27 10:38:44 |
JADA
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Hmmmm. I dont like pediaphiles, I checked out the story for the spanking. he got what he desterved, but in a longer version his penis should have ben bit off an inch at a time. he he hee |