| 2005-09-12 00:32:29 |
All this because of flowers?
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it was an "okay" story, if it was longer it would have been better and i know that this is fiction but making it a little more realistic would help. also try not to use computer talk such as "omg" |
| 2007-09-28 00:14:32 |
All this because of flowers?
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cool he should have cryed and begged more but very good |
| 2004-12-07 12:11:06 |
Deneuralized Pussy
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needs more energy, 3/4 of it was just blab, when i want a sex story, its gotta hav a load of sex in it. |
| 2004-12-07 19:23:42 |
Deneuralized Pussy
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i liked it, sure it could use some work but i want a sequal. |
| 2005-02-03 19:57:23 |
Deneuralized Pussy
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This was a great idea, you need to build on it man. |