| 2004-09-11 19:56:50 |
Alex's First One
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needs to be longer ^_^ |
| 2004-11-18 20:09:11 |
Alex's First One
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it was just starting to get interesting and you cut it off!!!! |
| 2005-01-26 20:33:02 |
Alex's First One
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great lead in, but much too short |
| 2005-06-20 16:32:12 |
Alex's First One
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dude its like u stole my real life story , same and i mean same thing happend to me when i was 14 years old but instead of my aunt it was my neighbour lady Smantha ;) . wat a hot woman she was . nice story , keep writing and make them longer and more detailed . |
| 2005-12-03 05:09:13 |
Alex's First One
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Great story, a little short though you could become exellent at this. Serously |