| 2004-11-19 20:27:09 |
Fun in bus
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I was wondering if you wrote this in your native language and translated it on your computer. I would read more english language stories to get a better idea of ssyntax, spelling and the correct use of grammer. Otherwise nice and hot. |
| 2004-11-24 06:21:25 |
Fun in bus
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It was nice for the first time.plot was erotic.but u could have moulded it in a still better way. |
| 2004-11-24 06:38:56 |
Fun in bus
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gd story, the curves story took were good & was gd to read it |
| 2004-11-24 06:38:56 |
Fun in bus
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it was a commendable endeavour,but eroticity could have been increased. |
| 2004-11-25 06:19:35 |
Fun in bus
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I give you 7 but make it more big some thing like meeting after bus fun |