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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2004-11-30 01:02:33 | Maribel_(1) | Well, Gail, I've had a good think about it. You're a bit of an enigma - it's almost like there are two different people writing. Yea Yea is out to lunch on the spelling - there are over 100 errors in spelling and grammar. I wouldn't recommend trying to make a living writing - rudimentary skills are common place and, regardless of the content, will satisfy only semi-literate readers. Back to the split-personality - you use dialectism haltingly. Most of the writing appears to originate from a different source - not a native English writer, I'd say. So, the combination of poor and inconsistent use of dialect with many non-English phrasings makes for strange reading. It subsumes the story. My parting shot, Gail - your imagination needs an airing. You show a glimmer of skill in the descriptive segments bur you live in a very confined world. |
| 2004-11-30 17:48:54 | Maribel_(1) | that was good try making one about a teen sister and older brother fucking eachother |
| 2004-12-02 16:19:22 | Maribel_(1) | I am a first time reader but i have read 3or 4 of your stories and i think that you are doing a great job with them. So far i have loved all of them. Good job. love you love rebelone |
| 2004-12-07 16:53:39 | Maribel_(1) | Average length is around 6", not 9. Good story, though. |
| 2004-12-07 21:42:35 | Maribel_(1) | Great story Gail. I loved it. Keep up the good work! |