| 2004-12-21 13:37:10 |
The adventures of dave part 2
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Well here it is the second part. please comment on it because it really helps me improve my stories. there won't be a new one out till after the new year soz but i'm goin away so meh. |
| 2004-12-23 00:26:51 |
The adventures of dave part 2
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not bad but needs to be longer |
| 2005-01-09 04:48:35 |
The adventures of dave part 2
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shit story |
| 2004-12-21 12:57:27 |
My Mature Neighbour
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worst.. |
| 2004-12-21 13:27:53 |
My Mature Neighbour
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if you didn't have time to check spelling and grammer why didn't you just wait, and at the same time fix your story |