| 2005-10-02 21:09:59 |
Megan's Sleepover
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The first rape cut out too soon! I wanted details of him stuffing it to her. The second chick was way to interested in getting fucked by someone she could not even see. How unbelievable is that? Great premise, but story needs a lot of work before you move on to second part. |
| 2005-10-04 02:21:59 |
Megan's Sleepover
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Not very erotic, speaking from the psychological profile of a rapist. Way too innocent. Why are you afraid of your character being too sadistic??? "Why take by force when you can get for free?" Do understand rape at all? |
| 2005-10-06 02:40:06 |
Megan's Sleepover
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Intresting. A litle light on the meat of the matter, but the set up is well writen and engaging. 9/10 |
| 2005-11-14 20:53:06 |
Megan's Sleepover
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what happens next? |
| 2005-11-25 23:54:41 |
Megan's Sleepover
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first was far too short. although dialogue was good, nice setup for a psycho killer. The one wih the constant happy tone that makes you think they are innocent. |