| 2004-03-12 17:56:57 |
Dream girl_(1)
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English is obviously not the author's first or even second language. He should either learn the language he wishes to write in, or have an editor who speaks and writes the language help him. As it is presented, it is about the worse here! |
| 2004-03-13 21:46:41 |
Dream girl_(1)
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Learn some English, Dumb Fuck |
| 2004-03-16 14:38:57 |
Dream girl_(1)
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Hey sweetie, great storie. Much love! |
| 2004-03-18 09:18:29 |
Dream girl_(1)
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can you understand the English language at all? |
| 2004-03-18 14:51:36 |
Dream girl_(1)
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Stick to high school and video games, and leave the porn writing to the adults, son... this story sucked total ass, and the spelling was atrocious. |