| 2016-01-10 21:17:10 |
A Past new Beginning (The Mission 2)
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I FULLY AGREE WITH THE COMMENT IMMMEDIATELY BEFORE MINE STORY NEEDS A COMPLETE REWRITE AND FAR MORE DETAIL. NOT REALLY MAKING ANY SENSE AT ALL. |
| 2016-01-10 22:05:44 |
An old Butler and his rich bitches part 1
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IF YOU ARE GOING TO WRITE A STORY THAT IS PLAUSIBLE, AT THE VERY LEAST , GET THE AGES RIGHT SO THAT IT IS, AT THE LEAST, WORTH, ATTEMPTING TO READ, THIS IS NONE OF THAT. |
| 2016-01-11 21:24:16 |
The Royal Genies - Chapter 02
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Not changed much, still just slap around rubbish, when is the good stuff coming? |
| 2016-01-14 21:00:25 |
A New Day, The Other Me chapter 1
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Most definately an interesting twist on the original series, I just hope that he grows some balls and gets back at the people that have driven him into being a timid hermit, especialy his mother and step family.. |
| 2016-01-14 21:42:56 |
Asian Mom Jenny and her son Chris part 4
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THIS STORY NOW IS JUST RUBBISH, JUST SEX,SEX, AND MORE SEX, NO RHYME OR REASON, NO PLOT, NONSENSE IS TOO NICE A WORD TO DESCRIBE IT... |