| 2005-02-10 00:33:51 |
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Personaly I liked the first one better the thrid could be great jsut put some effort into it |
| 2005-02-10 15:11:23 |
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i thought hte first one was better also this one idk ii dont have any incentive to continue it anymore me and emghan broke up and i drew the stories from fanatasies i thought off and since i dont do that anymore ill have ot end this or add a 3rd sotry witha trasisiton between girls idk what ill do |
| 2005-02-11 01:29:54 |
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Good Good....could've been better....try and write more |
| 2005-02-12 01:18:09 |
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Pretty good, needed action between the sisters.
plus, learn to spell, and to separate your characters: whose birthday was it? |
| 2005-02-17 14:03:10 |
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put some fucking paragraphs in and proofread it before you submit....
ill be out in a few minutes, whose ill?
what the hell are form tits? |